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Chocolate Cake



By: Geraldine G. Flores (Ms. “G”) 

Our most popular cake. Of course anything choc...
Our most popular cake. Of course anything chocolate! (Photo credit: Wikipedia)

A family of four with a strong bond, represented by the time and effort they all put in the kitchen while creating a magnificent piece of work – a moist, mouth watering chocolate cake with a beautiful `dark chocolate glaze. Unfortunately as time went by the distance grew, time spent in the kitchen lessened just as much as the time spent together. Parents too busy living their lives, failing to notice their elder daughter’s increasingly frequent headaches while the children are too innocent to speak up.

Part I : (On the set, Dianne while reading in the living room suddenly felt dizzy)

Dianne: Why am I always feeling this way? My head, oh, it’s so painful. (younger sister Donita appears)

Donita: Dianne, I’d better tell mom and dad about this!

Dianne: No, Donita, they’re both busy. They don’t even have time attending our parent-teacher meetings in school. Don’t worry, I’ll just take some medicine and then after a while, I’ll feel better again. [phone rings twice]

Donita: Reyes residence, good evening (listens to the caller). Dad…dad! The call is for you.

Dad: (To Donita) Thank you. (then speaks to caller on the phone) Oh, yes my friend, I did not forget our appointment tonight. I’ll just  take a shower  then I’ll see you all. Okay? Bye. (dad leaves the living room to get ready)

(Friends Rose and Peter knock at the door)

Rose: Hello Dianne. Hello Donita, you forgot  to attend our meeting this afternoon, that’s why we came to visit you now.

Dianne: Oh sorry, we forgot, please come in. Have a seat.

Peter: Thank you, we actually came here for your mom’s chocolate cake, yummy!

Dianne: I like it too, the chocolate cake of my mom is my favorite, the best of all the chocolate cakes I have ever  tasted in my whole life (about to cry) but I’m sorry – we no longer have any, she’s so busy these past few days. No more time to bake a chocolate cake.

Rose: Oh no Dianne, don’t be sad, don’t worry. Peter  is just kidding, we came here because you and your parents were not around during our meeting.

Donita: So what was the meeting all about?

Peter: We have agreed that we will go camping this weekend, we can bring along our parents.

Dianne: That would be nice, but would that cost too much? And where would that be?

Rose: Not at all! B$60 only for one person and it will include everything  already. We just have to bring our own personal  things. The bus will pick us up 6 am at the covered court.

Peter: Bring your favorite  swimming attire and your mom’s chocolate cake! Just kidding  Dianne. Temburong is so beautiful we could also go swimming there.

Rose: We will experience having a camp fire as we go singing, telling stories, dancing and playing too.

Peter: We will sleep in the tent and feel the real nature’s touch! I’ll bring my video cam with me, would you like to join us?

Donita: That sounds great! Dianne, please… let’s go with them.

Dianne: I’d love to Donita but we have to ask permission and money from our parents. (car sound – broom broom broom) That’s dad for sure.

Donita: Oh no! He’s gone, where’s mom?

Dianne: There in their room… busy.

Rose: Busy working at home?

Donita: No, busy preparing herself.

Rose: Hurry up! For sure she’ll allow you.

Dianne: I hope so, go now Donita,  ask permission from Mom.

Peter: Great ! So, we could count you in now.

Donita: Okay…mommy, mommy, where are you? Dianne, she’s no longer here. (Donita returns to the living room.) As usual she flew away again.

Peter: Is your mommy a bird?

Donita: Of course not! But whenever my dad goes out, she goes out too. We hardly even see each other at   home anymore. I wish everything was like before…mom baking a chocolate cake with me and Dianne, dad – taking our pictures and…(Donita says these lines w/ tears in her eyes)

Dianne: Donita stop. (to their friends) I’m so sorry, we can’t go with you guys on your camping trip this weekend…my head, it’s aching again. Donita, please give me some medicine now.

Donita: Yes, but we really need to go to the hospital, I’m really worried about you.

Dianne: Oh, no, we have no money.

Peter: Don’t worry, I have a lot of money in my  wallet, I’ll bring you to the hospital. (Peter trying to get his wallet from his pocket. Rose stopped her.)

Rose: Never mind showing it, let’s carry Dianne now.

Dianne: Thank you both, for being here. (then Dianne closes her eyes)

Donita: Please don’t leave me, I don’t want to be alone (crying now). Wake up please.

Peter: Hey you! Stop crying. She’s not dead – just dizzy, she’ll be alright. We will bring your sister to the nearest hospital. Go with me and Rose, please inform their parents. (Donita helped Peter carry Dianne instead)

Rose: Okay, I will! Better go now. Peter, take care of them.

Peter:Yes, I will, don’t worry.

Part II: (At the hospital, Dianne lying on a bed, mom and dad were fighting at first then Donita dramatically stops them upon hearing them both.)

Dad: Now, look at what you have done! You’re not in the house. It’s our neighbor  who took Dianne to the hospital.

Mom: Look  who’s talking, you don’t even know Dianne’s sickness.

Dad: You’re  supposed  to be the mom, you should know that.

Mom: And you’re the dad, you’re always out of the house. You don’t have time for us – always off with your friends leaving your family behind!

Dad: And you? You don’t care about us anymore. Maybe, it’s better for us to part ways.

Mom:  (Scoffs) You’re scaring me? Go away! (pushes dad to the door)

(Donita enters through the door. She was listening to their conversation.)

Donita: Dad, mom, I hate you both -even if   Dianne is here in the hospital, you still don’t stop fighting, I’d better leave you  both!

Dad: No Donita, come back!

(Donita about to leave but Dianne called them.)

Dianne: Donita, mommy, daddy (then closes her eyes)

(Everyone starts crying – thinking that Dianne’s gone already)

Mom: Dianne no, wake up, wake up! We love you both, we care for you.

Donita: Dianne, please don’t leave us. I’ll not run away anymore because I know that you’re here for me.

Dad: We’re so sorry Dianne, promise , we will be good parents to you from now on. We love you my daughter. I do love each and  everyone of you.

Dianne: (Wakes up smiling) I’m still alive, I heard all of you – everything you’d said and don’t worry the doctor says I’m okay. I’m very happy – we’re all together now.

Mom: Promise Dianne… from now on, I’ll take care of you and Donita and of course  your dad too. (daughters tease parents)

Dad: I love you (to mom)

Mom: I love you too.

Dad: Dianne, Donita, I love you both – very much  too.  From now on I’ll devote quality time for you, my family. I could never afford losing this wonderful family. I’m so sorry.

Dianne & Donita: Thanks dad, thanks mom, we love you both.

(As friends enter the door, family members  are still embracing each other)

Peter: Flowers for you Dianne from your dad. I bought it for him.

(Dianne looks at dad, smiles and says)

Dianne: Dad, thank You.

Rose: And your favorite chocolate cake too from your mom. She asked me to bring it here. She can’t wait to see you until she has finished baking.

Dianne: Mom, you still remember my favorite?

Mom: Of course Dianne, I love you. I’m so sorry.

Dianne: Thank you, mom.(Diane embraces mom)

(Both with tears in their eyes)

Peter: (Carrying the chocolate cake) Oops! Enough of the crying. The chocolate cake will melt! Can I have a slice now? I miss this badly too.

(Everybody laughs)

Rose: Pretty obvious! Come on pose  first with the chocolate cake. I’ll take a picture. Everyone…1, 2, 3, smile!

Lesson in Life: Never take your family for granted because they are all that matter in the world!


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13 thoughts on “Chocolate Cake

  1. Nice script! Very well said. But I have noticed that there are some commas, periods, and capitalization of some words that were not used properly, but on the other hand it was so nice and very touching kind of story I’ve ever read when it regards to chocolate cake together with the family and friends altogether. Keep it up!

    1. Thank you for letting us know, John. My fault really! I got too excited to post this and forgot to edit. Hope that it’s better now! – Grace

  2. Thanks for your comment John Mark. hope you’ll enjoy reading my next script too”.Ms.G.”

  3. This is a heart warming and beautiful story. It is true that time separates us from each other because of our work and priorities in life. Yet the simple things in life like a chocolate cake would bring us back together and it reminds us we can count on each other when it matters most. God bless you Ms G.

  4. WoW! well said, thank you Vince. “Chocolate Cake” , a sweet reminder indeed. God bless you too,my friend.I’ll always cherish our Entablado Pilipino days w/ our mentor,Director & Scriptwriter before, the late Rusty Sangalang. Miss all our stage plays, TV Tapings & acting workshops too & all of you really.

  5. hi dear .. i’am geno from wayn… nice script

    1. Hello, Geno, thank you for taking time to read my script.Thanks for the compliment too. I have four more heart warming scripts on this site,namely: A Birthday Party, Son, I Love You, Sweet Smiles and for a kid’s play; Princess Kitty’s Happy Land Adventure.Enjoy Reading!!!

  6. Is all good ,,,this site is awesome and is nice for me to see….the moral of that story that Geraldine just tell is something i can’t explain and i want to meet Geraldine one day cos i love her

    1. Hello, Mike Rowland, hope to meet you one day too friend.Thank You for your nice comments.It’s alright if you can’t explain something i just want you to enjoy reading my scripts and the other good and useful articles on this site .I know that you are a friendly man so i hope you can share the link to your other friends too ,that will be a big help to us. Thank You.

  7. How things are changing in our society, what affects the over commitments are leveling over the family as a unit, in a very polite way Geraldine has surfaced the issue. A very well written script highlighting a genuine problem. Impressed with the idea and the way it has been dealt, wishing you success as a writer & director!

    1. Thank You for wishing me well Khalid and thanks for the compliments too.As the saying goes;”The only permanent thing in this world is CHANGE”, but we all hope for a change for the better.As long as we have people around us that we can call our “FAMILY” to the truest sense of the word, for sure we will all be inspired to live our lives to the fullest.

  8. How beautifully a problem has been highlighted which is affecting society and specially the family unit. The central idea is impressive and Geraldine has transformed it into words in an impressive way which forces one to analyse the own family & lifestyle. If the prudent lesson is drawn I think the purpose of Geraldine is achieved. I wish her success as writer and director in her future pursuits.

    1. Syed Khalid, my good friend on the net,for taking your time out to read my script i feel honored really,Thank You so much! May your wish for me come true also friend.You know i love doing these things really; acting, scriptwriting & directing.Thanks for your nice comments too.Hope you’ll still have the time to read my four other scripts on this site and all the other good articles.
      Enjoy Reading!

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